Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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it is thought by some that career contentment is more vital compared with a permanent position, others,
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, believe that it is more essential to have a lasting post. I consider having work security as essential in a lasting position. The reason why some individuals think that task fulfilment is essential is that they are committed to the task.
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, individuals love what they do no matter the circumstance. They are able to perform tasks without gratification.
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, Teachers at BrainGrace International School are eager to teach their pupils because they see it as a way to positively impact knowledge in the children and they in turn find contentment in doing it.
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, commitment is an integral part of job satisfaction.
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is a valid point, I disagree with it. Others,
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, believe that permanent jobs are better because of Job security.
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is because individuals have no fear of being sacked at any time even when they did something bad.
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, their post is secured in the organization as they are staff and not contractors who can be laid off anytime the company
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fit.
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, The Civil Servants in Federal parastatals in Nigeria are not under pressure
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carrying out their day-to-day activities, so they are relaxed, and more task is done effectively and efficiently.
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to say that having a lasting post in an organization makes one less pressured. In conclusion,
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people may vary in their opinion, I consider job security as an essential tool for efficient and effective disbursement of any given position.

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Consider providing a more balanced argument by expanding on both views before stating your opinion. This could enhance the completeness of your response.
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