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Many people think that we have to focus on the extinction of certain animal species, while others think that we should pay attention to the problems of human beings. Discuss

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According to some people it is pivotal to emphasize on the protection of animal species that are under extinction:
however
, others disagree. In their opinion, issues of human beings ought to be given more priority.
This
 essay will discuss why I think that both the problems need to be treated with utmost importance. On the one hand, some people maintain the view that attention should be given to the rising issues of animal extinction. The primary reason is that animals are an integral part of the ecosystem. When many different species of animals go extinct, the repercussions will be felt across the planet. Extinction of wildlife will disrupt the food chain and it is only a matter of time before humans find themselves in trouble. What’s more, animals
also
own
located at or attached to
on
 the planet and they have the right to exist here just like us humans. Killing them for our benefits and engaging in activities that make their existence difficult is not only unethical but
also
 dangerous.
On the other hand
, problems faced by humans
also
 need to be addressed. The truth is that a large section of humanity still lives in poverty and ill health. It is important to uplift them and a great deal of funding is essential to achieve
this
. Obviously, there is a limit to the amount of money governments can use for wildlife conservation. In conclusion, every creature on earth deserves
equal right
Suggestion
an equal right
 to survive and it is possible only when they live in
co operation
joint operation or action
cooperation
 with each other.
Hence
, I think that efforts should be made to protect all species that face the threat of
extinction but
Accept comma addition
extinction, but
 it should not be at the expense of human welfare and needs.
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