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Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development

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The development of businesses has given rise to the growing number of advertisements that can be seen anywhere, on streets or in the media. In my opinion,
this
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 phenomenon could be both positive and negative. On the one hand, advertising has brought a number of benefits for not only consumers but
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 businesses. Certainly, advertising provides details about newly launched products, which is important for consumers who are still unaware of
such
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 products. In fact, improving quality alone would be less effective if producers failed to commercialize their commodities. Putting it in another way, companies, entrepreneurs
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, spend a great deal of money on publicity materials in order to approach prospective customers.
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, in return, generates higher profit and enhances those companies’ competitiveness in the market.
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, the surge in quantities of commercials exerts several undesirable impacts on customers.
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,
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 of being well-informed about a new line of product, people are being bombarded with all kinds of advertisements. Those can be either deceptive or annoying; and
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 information overload has become a nuisance to many people, particularly when their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 telecasts are constantly interrupted by irrelevant promotions.
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, advertising encourages people to purchase what they do not really need. Images of celebrities are used in many extravagant commercials, especially cosmetics, to stimulate people to purchase products that are being advertised.
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, in reality, most of those products are of little use to buyers. In conclusion, advertisements of various types have become prevalent in modern society; and
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 is, in my view, advantageous and detrimental as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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