Some people prefer to provide help or support directly to the local community. Others prefer to give money to national or international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Today poverty is

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Poverty today is

still on full display anywhere in the world, even from the sparkling and vibrant streets of Los Angeles, or to the less glamorous district of Mumbai city. In the fight against poverty, help is at hand.

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, a bone of contention remains whether people should directly support the underprivileged or give their donations to charities.

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essay will look at

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issue from both perspectives. There are clearly justifications for why some funders would rather help the poor by themselves.

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of all, help is given instantly as there is no paperwork, no collection, no delivery involved. It would

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mean that no

money

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is lost

into

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the pockets of corrupt government officials.

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of all, it has been found that a considerable number of recipients of aid programs spend

money

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on children’s education or

healthcare

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health care

, rather than alcohol or cigarettes.

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, development can be easily promoted.

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, the idea of giving cash directly to the poor is

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treated with

skepticism

doubt about the truth of something

scepticism

by many people who

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suggest that

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or any other type of donation should be given to charity organisations. Their main argument is that for the people whose lives have always been devoid of material possessions or

money

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, knowing how to manage the financial aids is out of the question. There are many cases that poor people use the

money

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to start businesses;

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, bankruptcy is imminent due to their lack of knowledge regarding financial management. For

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reason, charities, which can distribute the funds in a more effective way, prove their prominent roles in improving living standards of the impoverished. To conclude, I am inclined to think that giving

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to charities is a better way to end poverty as it deals with deeper causes of the issue in the long run.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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