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Some people think that the governments should give financial support to artists, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whether the
government
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 should provide financial assistance to the country’s artists is an often debated topic. Some people believe that the
government
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 should help artists; others think that spending money on artists is akin to wasting the nation’s wealth. In
this
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 essay, we will take a look at both sides of the argument before arriving at a conclusion.
Art
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 forms are an integral part of the nation’s cultural heritage. Some people believe that by helping artists the
government
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 can help protect the cultural legacy of the country.
This
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 argument is true to a certain extent. The advent of films and television has considerably affected the popularity of other
art
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 forms. It is a known fact that many ethnic
art
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 forms are now dying because of the lack of support. A little financial assistance is all that it takes to protect these
art
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 forms from total extinction. Some people,
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, argue that spending money on arts and artists is wasteful because there are several other sectors that desperately require
government
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 funding.
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, in many undeveloped and developing
countries millions
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countries, millions
 of people don’t have access to safe drinking water or electricity. Meeting these requirements is far more important than protecting the nation’s
art
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 forms from extinction. After
analyzing
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analysing
 both sides of the argument, it is felt that
government
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 assistance to artists is justifiable only in countries that have successfully met all basic requirements of its people. In the case of undeveloped
nations it
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nations, it
 makes better sense to spend public money on other pressing needs of the people.
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