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The world natural resources are consumed at an ever-increased rate. What are the dangers of this situation? What should we do?

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It is true that the world is experiencing the problem of the overconsumption of natural resources.
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 has resulted in serious consequences which should be addressed urgently.
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 unsustainable growth in the exploitation of natural resources has already had some damaging impacts, both on the environment and on communities. In environmental terms, contamination of land, air and water has reached alarming levels owing to dependence on fossil fuels to meet growing energy demands.
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coal is the main source of energy in China and Australia. The burning of coal and oil result in air pollution and global warming, through the release of greenhouse gases. In social terms, forest destruction results in a shortage of timber and commercial over-fishing devastates fish stocks. These environmental
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problems, then
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 impact on local communities and fishing villages like Napflio in Greece,
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, threatening jobs and traditional ways of life. It is evident,
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, that some immediate measures should be taken by governments to tackle
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 problems.
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, citizens must be encouraged to use renewable energy sources.
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, governments need to increase investment in alternative
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sources, including
 solar power and wind power to make them viable for public use in years to come.
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, governments should impose and enforce laws to protect and conserve natural resources. In
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 way, sustainable levels of the use of natural resources can be determined and those who exceed these limits or break these rules can be severely punished. Traditional fishing communities will be safeguarded and the timber industry can be controlled, so that there will always be a supply of wood for building houses in the future. In conclusion, the overconsumption of natural resources worldwide is already having major impacts and immediate measures are called for in order to mitigate the consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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