The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.

The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.
The table illustrates
reasons
about
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why UK
people
travelled to different places between the years 1994 and 1998. The
second
chart gives information about where they have travelled.
Overall
, most
of
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the
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UK
travellers
visited western Europe,
while
very few
people
travelled to North America and other areas.
Holiday
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The holiday
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is the prime reason why
people
have travelled abroad. In 1994, 22072
people
visited foreign
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nations
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in
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which three-quarters accounted for holiday
reason
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reasons
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. Business
travellers
and visits to friends and relatives are followed by holiday
travellers
, which accounted for 3155 and 2689
travellers
respectively. Despite falling to 21610 total
travellers
in 1995, the figure increased considerably till the end of the period.
Furthermore
,
travellers
accounted for
remaining
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reasons
except for other
reasons
almost followed the same pattern as the total
travellers
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traveller's
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figure.
Finally
,
people
travelling for other
reasons
have
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increased from 896 in 1995 to 1054 in 1997, before falling to 990 in 1998.
In addition
to
this
, Western Europe hosted most of the
travellers
from the UK in all the years with almost 90% of total
people
.
In contrast
, other areas and North America hosted the remaining 10% of
people
with almost below 2500
people
combined in all the years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people, travellers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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