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Band 6.5

On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter describe the item you lost explain how you lost it tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to
insurance
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the insurance
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 company manager that I have recently lost my mobile phone during my holiday in Doha and
this
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 item is insured.
Firstly
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, it was an Apple iPhone 15 pro max which cost me approximately 1,399 dollars.
Then
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, It was black and
has
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had
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 the logo of
"Muborak
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the "Muborak
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 IELTS" learning center on the back of the case. If we come to the loss of the phone
that
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apply
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I was on a holiday trip to Doha city between 10 March to 20 March 2023. I was on Katara Beach on 12 March when I lost my phone in the sand. After that, I searched for it for a long time but could not find it. To resolve the problem, I would appreciate it if you could cover the item’s cost. Because I got it recently. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Samandar
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Coherence & Cohesion
Be sure to vary your sentence structures more to enhance readability. Your letter is competently constructed but could benefit from more complexity in sentence forms.
Task Achievement
To increase your score further, consider adding more detail about how the loss affects you personally, or what steps (if any) you've already taken to address the issue. This will give your letter more depth.
General
Double-check for minor typos or grammatical errors to ensure that your writing is as polished as possible.
Tone
Consider using more formal language and avoiding colloquial expressions or slang. This will make your letter appear more professional.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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