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1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With an ever increasing demand of educated human resources, whether the fees for the tertiary
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 should be payable by students or by the state, is always a debatable matter among
educationists
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. Some people think that it must be fully paid by the government, as it is a matter of success for any nation, whereas, others oppose it.
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, I think that, students must pay their fees by themselves. The reasons of my inclination, are explained in trailed paragraphs.
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, students, who have already completed schooling and moving ahead for their tertiary
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, are mature enough to earn as well as study together.
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, earning while studying, can inculcate several essential skills,
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 as time and
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 management. The pupils, who are studying by their own
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, can have a better understanding of the value of
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.
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, a recent survey, carried out by the Oxford university, has revealed that, the students, who are responsible to pay their own fees in the college, are more successful in their lives and they can evolve into better citizens of the nation.
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, there are some people in the country, who do not get a one-time meal, potable water and even the primary
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, let alone the higher
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. So, governments must spend
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 to provide the basic necessities to citizens,
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 of spending for the college students.
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, the government can provide a certain types of loans and subsidies to the students, who are bright, but cannot afford because of the lack of funds.
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, the developed countries,
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 as the UK and the US, have accepted that the reason behind their success is not spending
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 on university students, but it is, spending
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 on primary children. To conclude, as providing the university
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 is not the responsibility of the government, students must pay their fees by their own.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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