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Now the machine is very difficult, and a lot of work automated. Does the machine automation have more pros and cons ?

#machine #work #automation
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Undoubtedly, technology has revolutionised the entire world by producing automatic machinery,
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, nowadays tedious and complex
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 has become very simple and easy.
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, there are lots of advantages and disadvantages of having too much automation. On the positive side, machines have brought a huge revolution in human
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 by escalating progress rate.
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, as we know that in
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 technical era the speed of daily tasks and efficiency both have increased due to machines. Since, people have a better way of communicating
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 as vehicles, internet and so on, as a consequence, the
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 which was being done in days and months now can be completed in minutes and hours. To exemplify, in the past, when mechanization has not developed, the country progress and
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 speed utterly relied on human and animal muscle power, which took a long time, but now the speed of
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 has been boosted by machines. On the other side,
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 automation and advancement has ushered various positive consequences in human
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, it
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 has brought lots of stress in our entity. Because, people have become addicted to modern machines- cars, motorbikes and so on, perhaps due to having too much dependent.
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, if today these machines are snatched from people,
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, they could not survive.
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, these machines are
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 putting a pernicious effect on people precious dexterity. The conclusion of the above discussion is that
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 the technology or machines have become a way of stress in human
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,
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 have become an integral part of human
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 success, which is a sign of evolution.
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, the advantages of automatic machines are outweighed than disadvantages.

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