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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion

#money #time
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There has always been a contest of sorts between
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 and
time
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. While most people argue that
money
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 can't buy you happiness, I strongly feel it is the most important resource to possess in the current scenario.
Time
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 is definitely a crucial element and a lot of things surround the same. Many would agree that it is important to have free
time
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 in order to do other things apart from work.
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 includes your hobbies, spend
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 with friends and family etc. There a number of people who spend most of their life trying to earn as much as they can but end up not finding an opportunity to use the funds they've making and saving.
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, just having a lot of free
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 at hand is not what it sounds like. You could have a lot of people around you
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initially but
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initially, but
 your lack of cash will draw them away. As a matter of fact, most or all things that you intend to do in your free
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 is not possible if you can't
fund
come upon, as if by accident; meet with
find
 them.
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, your hobby which could be as simple as collecting stamps need some amount of spending.
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 is an inevitable element in life. In fact, if you have
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 you could hire people to do mundane tasks and get
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 for yourself. It is not possible the other way round. To conclude, it is very clear that
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 is an important
factor but
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factor, but
 it does not
supercede
take the place or move into the position of
supersede
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 because one can buy other and not vice versa.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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