Now people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes? What are the effects on individual and society?

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Being out of home is getting more and more popular nowadays. Some believe that spending more time out reduces the chances of getting mentally ill or have

depressing

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depression

-thoughts while others claimed

this

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is a normal effect due to an organic growing population. It

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is, therefore

therefore

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, logical to think some individuals and people in general may present important behaviour and lifestyle changes.

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, red flags

has been raised

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have been raised

by the medical community because of the augmentation in patients diagnosed with depression and anxiety.

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, a research conducted by the Medical Society Association in EE.UU.

shown

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Shown

that by spending at least two hours out of home it can reduce in 89% the chances of having

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conditions.

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Undoubtedly

, loneliness while being locked at home, is one of the main common

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causes

of depression in America.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

134 words

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