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Thanks to the development of air travel and telecommunication, contacts between different parts of the world have developed To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The data will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 only for the locations Toronto, Windsor and Mississauga. We will be looking into the income
tax
 data for the population who is in the lower 60% of the total population. The year assessed is
tax
 year 2014. The data will be collected from the Canada Revenue Agency. The data for Individual
Tax
 Statistics by Area (ITSA) for the
tax
 year 2014 is considered for
this
 analysis. The data
is
Suggestion
are
 available as a comma separated value file. Filter the data
first
 to list Toronto, Windsor and Mississauga. The data for Mississauga is not available in the
csv
 file. So we will look into data for Toronto and Windsor. We filter the data by CMA code 535
(
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(
Toronto) and 559.
(
Accept space
(
Windsor). The data is
then
 transposed to list the ranges and the locations. The values in the Range and other unwanted columns provincial Code
,
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,
CD
,
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,
CMA are removed.
Next
 we identify the lower 60% numbers as customers. Total number of returns for Toronto is 4573270. And the lower 60% of that would be 2743962. The
Tax
 range for
this
 would be $35,000 to $39,999.
For
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In
 location Windsor Total returns is 253730 and lower 60% of that would be 152238.
This
 comes in the $40,000 to $44,999
tax
 range.

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