-Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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Crime rate

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The crime rate

has increased manifold these days. In spite of the punishment, many convicts tend to repeat crimes once they get released from jail. I think there are several reasons for

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behaviour. In my opinion, it is the responsibility of the government and the society to solve

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problem. There are many reasons that encourage criminals to commit crimes again. The most important ones are social stigma, lack of emotional support and poor job opportunities. Criminal background drastically decreases job opportunities as no employer prefers to appoint an employee with

criminal record

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a criminal record

criminal records

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leaves them with no career options and

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no financial support. Many times, these criminals are not accepted by their own families and

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makes them lonely and homeless.

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, people don’t want ex-convicts to reside in their communities and treat them with suspicion. All these factors lead to hopelessness and directly or indirectly promote violence.

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, these problems can be avoided to a large extent by

government’s intervention

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the government’s intervention

as well as changes in people’s outlook towards these culprits. Jail inmates should be taught about the best possible ways to handle life in the most difficult situations and

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will prevent them from committing crimes again. The government should organise schemes that provide financial assistance and train them in useful jobs. Constant psychological counselling is necessary for the criminals and their families to rebuild personal relationships. The society should

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change their mindset and attitude towards prisoners and provide them with the necessary emotional support to become responsible individuals. To conclude, though there are quite a number of factors which encourage criminals to commit crimes again, I am of the opinion that the government and the society should take the responsibility to rehabilitate ex-criminals so as to prevent them from committing

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crimes.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Please outline your plans and strategies for actively participating in local and international communities throughout the IISMA program, and provide some concrete examples.

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Today school should teach thier student how to suvive finacially in the world today t what extent do you agree or disagree

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