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It is a fact that people nowadays are under a lot of pressure and their lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be the possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue?

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The
life
 of humans in today's society is becoming more and more stressful. People have to face many problems and overcome a lot of hurdles to live in the current society. There are a couple of reasons for
this
 miserable
life
, some have family
issues and
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issues, and
 some have
office
 disturbance and while others have business disputes. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some key reasons for stressful
life
 and in the end, I will give solutions to the situation.
Firstly
, the main problem which is causing our lives more problematic is the
traffic
 problem, whether you have to go to college, school or
office
, have to overcome the
traffic
 congestion, blockage or line-in in at the
traffic
 signals. Heavy rush
at
Suggestion
on
 roads causes the stress and when they reach their destination still they are feeling the miseries of the route, and at the end, they are not so fresh to start their day. The same situation while going back
home adding
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home, adding
 up to the
office
 tension and resulting in home fights.
Secondly
, the household problems are adding a huge part in
stressful
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a stressful life
life
. When you have less income than your expenditure than problems start in your married
life
 and having one kid adds up the tension. You always worry about grocery, garments, rents and bills; these all necessities dominate your income and leave you with only tensions. These problems could be eradicated wisely by taking decisions. You can overcome
traffic
 problems by shifting nearer to your
office
 or business. The government can balance
this
 issue by building multi-tier flats in nearby commercial areas or commuting transports or trams to
office
thus
 reducing the travel time and miseries. Another step Government should be taking is by lowering the bills and grocery items and setting the minimum wages for the general public. But eventually, every person should have to take steps to remove the stress by own efforts
or
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
 helping each other to live a happy
life
.
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