some people believe in fixed punishment, but others believe circumstance should be consider during judgement.

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Crime
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is part of our
society not
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society, not
for good. As per the law, if someone commits
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crime
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a crime
they must be punished for their
crime
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and some people believe in fixed
punishment
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, but others believe circumstance should be
consider
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considered
during
judgement
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the judgement
. I, personally not believe in fixed
punishment
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. As those who believe in fixed
punishment
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, they feel
this
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way because, they think it is the one and only solution.
For instance
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, a recent research found that more than 50% of criminal who faced a big
punishment
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for their silly
crime
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have gone away from the mainstream life.
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, they believe that criminals are not the part of the society.
For example
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, in Bihar several
theifs
the act of taking something from someone unlawfully
thefts
theirs
lynched by the mob. Nowadays, people always ask for
captical
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punishment
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. People are not trying to trust on the correction facility.
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, we must consider the circumstance in which the
crime
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occurred. A criminal should
also
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get a chance to correct their mistake.
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, a
theif
a criminal who takes property belonging to someone else with the intention of keeping it or selling it
thief
should not be punished as a most wanted criminal. As per the Indian penal code,
punishment
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of
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for
murder is fourteen years of imprisonment, but it should not
imposed
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impose
on a person in case of self-defence.
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, the
crime
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can be happened accidently. More specifically, a man got hit by a public bus when he was crossing the road by ignoring the traffic signals. Fixed
punishment
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should not the only way to make a criminal understand that they need to get back to the mainstream
Punishment
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should be given in consideration of circumstance.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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