Today people are living longer so they should have to work longer. Do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world
life
expectancy of people has increased to a great extent and they are expected to
work
lifelong.
This
essay totally disagrees with the statement because old people are deeply exhausted due to their age and their health impedes their
work
efficiency. Adults above the age of 60 are
at
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on
the verge of retirement
.
Accept space
.
Even their mental strength
diminish
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diminishes
and memory loss may
also
occur.Apparently, they cannot
work
as expected and they may feel overwhelmed.Fulfilling jobs may put strain on them and it seems to be arduous for them to complete their responsibilities
.
Accept space
.
For example
, in my
work
place I have one doctor who
is above 65 years old and crave
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is above 65 years old and craved
has above 65 years old and craved
is above 65 years old and crave
to
work
, but he actually has loss of memory and come to us several times a day and asks to go for clinical rounds even though he has completed for that day. Another reason is that aged people have a plethora of health issues.
This
may
restricts
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restrict
them from their
perfomance
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
performances
.Senior citizens have health issues like hypertension, insomnia
,
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,
diabetes which
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diabetes, which
distract them from their
work
.So even the expectancy of
life
is
increases it
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increases, it
increasing it
increasing increasing it
increased it
makes little difference
on
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in
the production. Even though medicine has a lot of impact on the lives of
aged
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aging
adults and improved their length of
life
than
expected they
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expected, they
cannot
work
for
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in
their
eentire
constituting the full quantity or extent; complete
entire
life
as the productivity may not be as efficient as before when they were young.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrinsic preference
  • liberating
  • physical activity
  • chronic diseases
  • natural light
  • job satisfaction
  • environmental connection
  • monotonous
  • dynamic
  • stimulating
  • fulfilling career
  • creativity
  • inspire
  • office politics
  • corporate structures
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