Should government make decisions about people's life style, or should people make their own decisions.

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With the advent of globalization, from
older era
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older eras
an older era
the older era
to recent years the lifestyles of the people changed a lot. It is thought that by some that the
government
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should make decisions for
individuals
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individual
individuals'
lifestyles,
however
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, others believe that the people should make the decision on their own.
This
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essay will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
both sides of the argument. On the one side, In many developing countries, people possess own decisions to enjoy their lifestyle. It is considered that developing countries have no rights to interrupt in the individual's life.
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, if individual infringes the law, the
government
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will take legal actions.
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, alcohol drinkers while driving vehicle ignores to obey rules and regulation would be fined and the
government
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should put them in the bars.
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,
instead
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of offensive with the law people have fully deceived to enjoy their life at fullest.
Ony
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On
Only
the other hand, People from developing countries have an opinion that the youngsters ought to rely on the
government
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decisions due to lack of education. Nowadays, individuals indulged in
poor society
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a poor society
poor societies
as they are more inclined to drugs and alcohol. It has been noticed by the
government
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that the youth of the country are less involved in their education and careers
although
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they are more inclined to bad society.
For instance
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, I saw the latest news on television regarding the group of youth arrested by the police in the case of drug dealing. In
this
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result, the
government
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commenced looking after
on
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at
the
people
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peoples'
peoples
lifestyles those tend to work for these kinds of bad job. In conclusion, I would like to say that I agree with
this
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notion that the
youth have right
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youth have a right
to enjoy their
life but
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life, but
in some
caese
an occurrence of something
cases
case
government
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should make decisions about the lifestyle of the people.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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