Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that,

community

services like charity, cleaning neighbourhood, imparting knowledge to the underprivileged should be made compulsory in the High School curriculum. I strongly agree with

this

, it is not only helps the students in becoming socially responsible adults, but

also

in shaping their character.

Firstly

community

service inculcates a sense of responsibility towards

society

that is

needed for shaping a better

society

For instance

, the introduction of the Swachh Bharat scheme in India's every school taught a student to keep our surroundings clean and never throw a litter on the roads or streets.

Hence

this

campaign is necessary to teach them to maintain cleanliness everywhere.

Such

services are

also

needed in future to develop a better

society

In addition

, students will interact with patients in their tender age,

this

thing allow them to handle the patients in the future.

Secondly

, voluntary services caters to the overall character development of an individual. It teaches a lesson of sympathy to the students, which is required to build our character.

Moreover

, unpaid

community

services help the poor and needy families, which are the part of our

society

, they get benefits from these services.

Furthermore

, if unpaid services are mandatory in high school,

then

it will help the students get the diploma certificates. These certificates will help them in a the future to get a better job in renowned companies. In conclusion, I think

community

services should be implemented in the high school, as there are various advantages of carrying out

community

services.

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unpaid community service
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transferable skills
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leadership
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