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Some people say that when deciding how taxes should be spent, governments should prioritise health care. Other people believe that there are more important priorities for taxpayers' money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary world, every working person according to their income pay tax to law enforcement agency which they use for development of people. A section of society thinks that
government
 should spend their budget mainly on
health
care whereas,
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care, whereas
 others believe that other factors
shouls
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
also
 prioritise.
This
eassay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
assay
 will
vivdly
in a vivid manner
vividly
 explain the notions along with my
persective
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
 supporting to
latter notion
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the latter notion
. To commence with the
explaination
a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.
explanation
 standing with former notion. As
health
 is wealth
,
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,
if the nation beings are
well
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good, then
good then
then
 they are able to denote their time more on work which increase their productivity as well as salary
as a result
 development of
country
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the country
a country
.
However
, some other reasons should àlso there which should be
look
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looked
 after.Except
health
 care.
Edcation
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Education
, poverty, building infrastructure are
also
 some factors on which
government
 should look after because these
all factors contribute to
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factors all contribute to
growth
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the growth
 of the nation. Lack of any facility can be a hurdle in overall growth To my mind
,
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,
 law enforcement agency should prioritise all the factor while making
budget they
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budget, they
 should equally spend money on each and every
feild
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
.
Accept space
.
 People gave them taxes because they want to gain all the
benifical
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benefits
beneficial
 facility which
r
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
 mandatory for their life cycle
.
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.
 To cap it up all,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 assert that no doubt,
health
 is
impertant factor
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an important factor
important factor
to
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in
of
loof
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
leave
love
 after but
government
 should not ignore the other one. Taxpayer gave their taxes for utilizing it for the growth of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
 as well as the well being
.
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.
 It can only be done if
government
 should prioritise each and everything according to its need.

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