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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
Socialism and being a good member of
the
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society is a crucial value every citizen should
holds
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.
However
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 there is always a debate going on regarding who will teach
this
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these
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 values to
children
,whether
its
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it's
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parents
 or teachers.In my opinion ,
eventhough
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even though
 educational institutions can
taught
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teach
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 them about
the
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social
skills
, it is the
parents
 who should make sure that their
children
 are socially responsible. On one hand , schools have a fixed curriculum which is purely based on
the
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academic subjects like mathematics, science and information
tehcnology
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technology
.They always strive to improve the performance of students in academic
skills
 to enhance their intellectual development.
Eventhough
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Even though
 some governments are conducting programs like
national
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 service
scheme
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, and community works to improve the social
skills
 of students, around 20% of the schools are participating ,as they are more interested in other sports and
arts
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 festivals to bring up the artistic
skills
 of pupils.
Hence
children
 are getting
less
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 chances to
know
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 more about society
from
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 schools.
On the other hand
, home is the primary institute for
children
 from where they are learning soft and social
skills
 like caring, sharing and showing empathy to others.
Parents
 are
the
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role models and their activities
are
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 having great influence
in
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on
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children
.
Respect
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 each other and giving space
for
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to
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 others is the first thing
children
 learn from the behaviour of elder members
in
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of
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 the family.
Also
 when
parents
 are participating in
the
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charity activities and voluntary
works
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work
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,it would automatically motivate their
children
 to do so.
For instance
, a recent survey in India
shown
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 that around 80% of students like to do community
works
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work
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 with
parents
.
To conclude
,
parents
 play a vital role in teaching social
skills
 and providing awareness to become
a
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good social
being
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beings
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 for their offspring than the educational institutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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