Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Socialism and being a good member of
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society is a crucial value every citizen should
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there is always a debate going on regarding who will teach
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values to
children
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,whether
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parents
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or teachers.In my opinion ,
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even though
educational institutions can
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them about
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social
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, it is the
parents
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who should make sure that their
children
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are socially responsible. On one hand , schools have a fixed curriculum which is purely based on
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academic subjects like mathematics, science and information
tehcnology
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technology
.They always strive to improve the performance of students in academic
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to enhance their intellectual development.
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some governments are conducting programs like
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service
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, and community works to improve the social
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of students, around 20% of the schools are participating ,as they are more interested in other sports and
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festivals to bring up the artistic
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of pupils.
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children
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are getting
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chances to
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more about society
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schools.
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, home is the primary institute for
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from where they are learning soft and social
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like caring, sharing and showing empathy to others.
Parents
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are
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role models and their activities
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having great influence
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children
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each other and giving space
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others is the first thing
children
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learn from the behaviour of elder members
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the family.
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when
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are participating in
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charity activities and voluntary
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,it would automatically motivate their
children
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to do so.
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, a recent survey in India
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that around 80% of students like to do community
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with
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To conclude
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,
parents
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play a vital role in teaching social
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and providing awareness to become
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good social
being
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beings
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for their offspring than the educational institutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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