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Some people work for the same organisation all their lives.Others think it is better to work for different organisations.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A few people spent most of their productive years in the same
company
, while others consider that it is better to shift from
one
 organisation to another. In
this
 essay, I will discuss and analyse both view and come to an opinion. The major reason why most people continue to work at the same
company
 till retirement is job security. To elaborate, once a
company
 is convinced that employees will stay, they would start providing allowances for accomodation, health and education of their kids.
This
 creates a stable financial basis for the future.
For instance
, shell, a major oil
company
 offers much free education and accomodation for their workers, and
thus
 is the most difficult
company
 to get a job.
Additionally
, employees who have worked for more than 5 years are entitled for pension schemes, which is
one
 of the perks of being a permanent employee.
On the other hand
, people who have worked for different organisations carry a wider range of experience. The expertise that
one
 gains from a
company
 can be used to boost another
company
's productivity, and is the most sought out quality nowadays. Most modern tech companies hire
such
 people, since they believe these people have ideas for new creative innovations. To exemplify, Apple and Google companies hire techies who have work experience in more than
one
company
.
Furthermore
,
this
 attitude of hopping from
one
 job to another is frowned by some companies. In conclusion, it can be said that working in different organisations benefits the individual and the
company
's calibre. But, being a permanent employee provides great financial stability and security
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