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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree? Use personal examples in your response

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Marrying couples often aspire to throw lavish wedding receptions with which to celebrate their union.
However
, often these parties carry with them a burden that newlyweds cannot comfortably bear. It is agreed that excessive spending on marriage celebrations can cause issues for new husbands and wives.
This
 will be shown by analyzing how excessive matrimonial ceremonies can encumber newlyweds financially and cause the entire wedding gathering to be somewhat impersonal in nature.
Firstly
, many
marrying
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married
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 couples often create problems for themselves when they spend beyond their means on their marriage reception.
For example
, some friends of mine in China borrowed an exorbitant amount of money to pay for a very large wedding they held several years ago. Acting in
such
 a prodigal way meant that for the two years following their matrimony, these young people had to dedicate every
last
 cent of their earnings to their debt. As
this
 money could have been put towards building a better life for themselves,
it is clear that
 problems can arise for people who spend extreme amounts on their weddings.
In addition
 to
this
, huge weddings can cause a marriage reception to be impersonal in nature.
For instance
, I once attended a very large and extremely beautiful Iranian wedding.
Although
 perhaps the most stunning matrimonial ceremony I have ever been to, the guest list was so large that I barely had a chance to give the bride and
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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