In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
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time
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job during their education and hardly ever travel.
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growing change among students can by solved by optimizing our education program, as well as by providing state loans for students and young people. Through changes in the way students are evaluated, like changing the ratio between exams and free papers, students will be able to use their Linking Words
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, by giving students and young people governmental loans, as done in the UK, USA and the EU, people will be financially secure and be able to work have more Linking Words
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for themselves.
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