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Overpopulation is a big problem today in many major urban centers. What are the causes, and possible solutions?

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It is a great issue that nowadays, most cities worldwide face unprecedented challenges because of a large population.
This
 essay shall look into the causes of
this
 phenomenon, and suggest some measures to alleviate
this
 situation.
To begin
 with, there are a variety of reasons behind the problems which are created by the overpopulation in many cities. One possible reason is that educated and skilled
people
 tend to move to the
city
 area from villages. As a part of
infrastructure
development
, quality education, and good industries are readily available in the urban
centers
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 which
create
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 more job opportunities there.
This
 is because students and technically skilled
people
 tend to move to the
city
 areas.
For example
, most of the renowned organizations established their factories including the head office in Dhaka, the capital
city
 of Bangladesh.
Therefore
, Dhaka
city
 has been crowded at an alarming rate over the years. Another reason is that the governments of many countries are focused on centralized
infrastructure
development
 rather than taking the initiative for rural
development
. The
people
 living in the urban areas are getting a taste of economic
development
whereas
people
 living in the villages struggling with ensuring the minimum living standard.
Hence
, the less economic
development
 initiatives by the
government
 encourage the
people
 to live in the
city
. There are two effective solutions to tackle the aforementioned issues caused by overpopulation.
Firstly
, the
government
 may redesign its long-term urban planning to decentralize
infrastructure
development
. If the
government
 takes steps to establish industries and educational institutions in the countryside,
then
 students and workable
people
 will be interested in staying at their places. In conclusion,
although
 overpopulation has been creating a lot of difficulties in cities all around the world, by taking the aforementioned measures, the
government
 may address these issues associated with better working opportunities
as well as
 the
development
 of
infrastructure
.
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