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Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, the print as well as the electronic media tends to dedicate large amounts of airtime and space to detailed reports about crimes.Personally, I believe
such
 details should be strictly censored, if not banned altogether. It is widely known that the press
provide
Suggestion
provides
 the public with criminal content in order to increase newspaper circulation and TV rating.These days the primary purpose of journalists covering the details of criminal acts is
,
Accept space
,
more often than that, to boost newspaper circulations and TV ratings.
Consequently
, a great deal of crime coverage is rather biased, exaggerated or fraudulent, which only result to terrorize communities and leave law-abiding people increasingly apprehensive of about crimes. An even more detrimental fact is that detailed reports of
crimes
Suggestion
crime
exposured
vulnerability to the elements; to the action of heat or cold or wind or rain
exposures
exposure
 on the press may provide the potential criminals with instructive learning materials, which would be hard to obtain
otherwise
.
This
 may help those who are in the process of panning a criminal act perfect their plans, avoid the pitfalls and make themselves harder to be tracked down by the police.
Thus
, without the prevention on criminal details the unlawful
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 would be more and more severe and the social harmony would be broken. Most importantly, particular coverage of heinous crimes may
further
 traumatize the victims of crimes because they have already suffered greatly for what they have experienced.Without
their consent
Suggestion
their consent, this
this
 could only add to theses innocent people's mental suffering and they may do some extreme actions. In conclusion, I strongly hold my point that any descriptions of crimes should not go unchecked as any longer as they may be false may
further
 drive up the already-high crime rate and may bring even more suffering to the victims of crimes.
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