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All education and healthcare should be founded by the government and free for everyone to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
Health care and education are both essential services that can be extremely expensive and, as a result, and affordable for those on a limited budget.
Nevertheless
, it is important to establish J
ess who
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Jess, who
is responsible for funding them. The health of a country ‘s citizens is vitally important. Without adequate h
ealthcare,
Suggestion
health care
 people of all ages can become extremely ill and
thus
 unable to earn a living or take care of themselves
.
Accept space
.
So it is essential for
government
 to provide well- equipped hospitals as well as highly trained staff to run them. There is
also
 a need for appropriate emergency services.
Furthermore
, without a good public education system, people may find they are limited in their work choices.i
f
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If
education is not provided free to all, those born into poverty may find themselves unable to rise above that level. We may all wish for
this
 essential service to be provided free of charge, but the
government
 need to obtain the funds for them from somewhere. Even when they are provided free of charge, there has to be some way of recouping the cost. One way of acquiring the necessary funds is by imposing taxes. Alternatively, access to welfare can be means-tested and based on personal levels of income. The irony is that, in democratic societies, where a
government
 is elected based on its promises, it is often the political party that promises tax cuts
that is
 elected to office. It seems clear that p
oorer members
Suggestion
the poorer members
of our society need
this
 type of aid and if these costs are covered, at least partially, by the
government
,
then
 we need to accept that our taxes will be used to fund them.
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