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The Bar Chart shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport.

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The following diagram,
depitcs
show in, or as in, a picture
depicts
 the production of
electricty
a physical phenomenon associated with stationary or moving electrons and protons
electricity
 by the Ocean Thermal Energy
Onversion
Suggestion
On Version
 system, abbreviated OTEC.
First
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,
worm
having or producing a comfortable and agreeable degree of heat or imparting or maintaining heat
warm
salt
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water
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 passing through the tubes
are heated
Suggestion
is heated
 up using solar energy. Once the
water
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enetrs
to come or go into
enters
 the evaporation chamber, it reaches its boiling point, become
vapour
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 and moves upwards, while the
salt
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 drops downwards.
Second
Linking Words
, the
vapour
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 passes upwards and initiate the movement of the turbine, which creates energy. The
salt
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 that was
seperated
being or feeling set or kept apart from others
separated
separate
 from the
vapour
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 in the evacuation room, moves downwards in tubes towards the
dondensation
(psychoanalysis) an unconscious process whereby two ideas or images combine into a single symbol; especially in dreams
condensation
 chamber.
Lastly
Linking Words
, the
vapour
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 is transferred
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the condensing chamber. There it comes in close contact with cold
seas
Suggestion
sea
sea's
water
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 running in a circular motion.
This
Linking Words
lead
Suggestion
led
 to a decrease in
temperture
the degree of hotness or coldness of a body or environment (corresponding to its molecular activity)
temperature
 and the condensation of the
vapour
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 back to
water
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, which is used for drinking purposes. The
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salt
a group of things of the same kind that belong together and are so used
set
also
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 comes in contact with the cold
water
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 and disperse.
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