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Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that students should be taught more about their fitness and wellbeing at school.
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the importance of health awareness among students
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secondly
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how these are beneficial for children.
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students are the future generations to lead the country
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while giving sufficient amount of lessons about health at schools, help them to improve their physical and mental strength and will keep them away from diseases.
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, teaching the necessity of washing hands before and after the food
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imporantance
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 vegetable and
fruits
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fruit
 consumption would decrease their common illness and that will put an end to the common sick leaves among pupils. Many schools are not promoting the physical activities during school hours.Schools should encourage and ensure that students are getting
adequate amont
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adequate amounts
adequate amount
an adequate amount
 of physical
excersise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
 and active participation in sports
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which will eventually improve their fitness level as well as academic level,.
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, In China, students are forced to do
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
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as it helps them develop their success rate. In conclusion
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Students spend most of their at school
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in order to mould a healthy and efficient generation
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health awareness and physical activities are essential that could be given in schools.

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