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Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree with the above notion? You should write at least 250 words.

#people #money #tax #notion
In contemporary world men and women both are willing to earn money and
further
 as per to
moder
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
 social phenomena, community need
huge
Suggestion
a huge amount
amount
 of financial asset to
sepend
pass time in a specific way
spend
 their daily life.
In addition
 to
this
, we can see society should spend
high
Suggestion
a high amount
amount
 of money as taxes to
government
 in direct or indirect way. As a human quality
anyone
an organization of employees formed to bargain with the employer
union
 do not interest to pay money unless personal advantage and people trust they do not pay taxes for
government
 and it should be go under personal savings account. As per to my notion we should pay our taxes because we are using
high
Suggestion
a high amount
high amounts
amount
 of natural and man made
resoirces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 within
high budget limit
Suggestion
high budget limits
the high budget limit
 or as a welfare benefits. We are paying our taxes and that taxes are funding for free
education free
Accept comma addition
education, free
 health services free security services free consultation services in
government secor
Suggestion
the government sector
government sector
 as major sections. In lots of Asian countries and
developping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
cpuntries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
, free services are very
famouse
widely known and esteemed
famous
 and that
cpmmunity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
do not like
Suggestion
does not like
 to pay direct taxes. But every item which we buy from the shop are
including
Suggestion
included
amount
 of tax which we pay indirectly. Without any doubt, in
europe
the 2nd smallest continent (actually a vast peninsula of Eurasia); the British use 'Europe' to refer to all of the continent except the British Isles
Europe
 and some well developed
countrylies
Suggestion
country lies
, it is rare to see the free goods and services to public community as well as the society should pay
direct
Suggestion
the direct amount
a direct amount
amount
 as tax frequently and it is hard to see
a
Suggestion
an
 unpleasant notion related to it with the well developed
infranstructure
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
infrastructures
 and other comfortable facilities onside the country. In Asian countries
such
 as Sri Lanka does not have high transparency of the
government
shedules and
Accept comma addition
schedules, and
schedules and
 common people do not have trust related to income tax and
government
 services. As a conclusion, to remark the development of the
country it
Accept comma addition
country, it
 is
manadatory
required by rule
mandatory
 need of paying income
tsxes
charge against a citizen's person or property or activity for the support of government
taxes
 and other taxes to the
government
 to develop the necessary needs and services
of
Suggestion
for
in
to
 the local community as a country.

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