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Mrs Barret, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours each day. Write a letter to Mrs, Barret. In your letter suggest how you could help her say why you would like to do this work explain when you would will and will not be available

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Dear Madam, I hope you're doing well. I have seen an advertisement that you are looking for someone who could be helpful for you at your home. I would like to ask about what type of help you need because I am busy for two hours at my office and after that, I will be free for the whole day. I could be helpful with your household work
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 if you ask me to take responsibility for the matters regarding the market, I will
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 do that without any hesitation. Please let me explain in detail. what tasks I would have to do so that I could mentally prepare myself for the duties.
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, I would like to inform you that I will not be available from 8:00am to 10:00am because of my job timings but aftewards, I will be free to serve you
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 your wish. I hope you will find me a responsiblle and dutiful person. I shall be gratefull for your kindness. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar.

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Consider revising your letter to include more personalized touches or specific details about why you are interested in helping Mrs. Barret. This could make your letter more engaging and compelling.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, you could structure your letter more clearly by dedicating distinct paragraphs to each topic: how you could help, why you're interested, and your availability.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and sentence structures to enhance the overall readability of your letter.
task achievement
You clearly addressed all parts of the task, covering what help you could offer, why you're interested, and your availability.
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The overall tone of your letter is polite and respectful, fitting the context of writing to someone you plan to help.
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