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Demand for food is increasing world wide. What is the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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Food
 is a basic need for living things, but scenario has come when there is
increment
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an increment
 in demand of
food
. I will discuss the causes and the solution of
this
 increasing problem in my
further
 essay.
To begin
 with, lifestyle of people is changing rapidly,
hence
 desire and
espiration
a will to succeed
aspiration
aspirations
inspiration
 of society resulted in the lack of natural resources like water,
food
 and so on.
Moreover
, population over the world is increasing
dramatically which
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dramatically, which
 in turn create an imbalance amount consumption and supply of
food
.
In addition
, people are extremely careless about saving
food
 constitute which is resulting in
shortage
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a shortage
shortages
.
For example
, it is commonly sighted that the leftover
food
 in restaurants
are thrown
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is thrown
in
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into
 dustbin rather than using it in a proper way. In a similar way, even a serious problem
can be solve
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can be solved
 by taking initiative steps by
international community
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the international community
.
Firstly global
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Firstly, global
 community should take responsibility of making people aware of new techniques of farming and producing more crops by using
fewer
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less
 land. More governments of countries should give farmers full support, so that people can continue selecting farming as
occupation
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an occupation
 and not leaving it due to less profit.
Lastly
,
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 in a town to collect the left over
food
 from the restaurants should be established that
food
 can be used to meet the hunger of the people. To conclude, awareness among the people and initiative to educate the Society about the farming can help to meet the problem of
food
 demand caused due to increasing population, changed lifestyle and
many
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much
 more.

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