Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. How far do you agree or disagree?

Some communities have a strong
opine
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opinion
that, game competitions involving group and stand alone have no scope in school academic plans, especially in private educational organizations. In my opinion, I agree that institutes are presently not focusing on physical fitness activities,
instead
focusing on concepts to build a
student
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student's
career.
However
, I believe that
government
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the government
and legal bodies are
an other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
reason for lack of social participation in children. On the one hand, organizations have
began
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begun
to focus more on
theoritical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
and practical approaches of a particular subject on students within four walls with exams, assignments and projects. Due to which, most of the learners have
began
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begun
to follow the same schedule
that is
being followed in their institution
further
lagging them back away from recreational activities.
For Instance
, most of the schools which are governed by state and central governments makes it mandatory that fun and games are necessary for youth.
This
helps the kid to be fit, healthy and
also
to understand the importance of team building and capacity
that is
important for
future
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the future
.
For instance
, most of the employees prefer to complete a given task in a team, rather than individually so as to make it easier
On the other hand
, higher monarchy
are failing
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is failing
to take necessary actions against firms breaking terms which were made important for
teenagers so
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teenagers, so
as to make them eligible for manpower in their industries. Lack of festivity and athletics makes youngsters to lowering their immune system, and
further
making them weak in
near future
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the near future
.
Finally
, in conclusion, I can conclude that, pastime which is becoming extinct in curricula should be brought
back which
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back, which
helps young ones to relieve their stress
further
becoming mentally and bodily strong.
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