Government should spend money on railways rather than results.

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in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,
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ought to spend money on
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, many of the
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railway
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are not good
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transportation
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time, some times it is
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some routs are under construction
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why people are disapointed about it. If higher authority is spent their
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railway related
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problems,
so
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people can save their time and
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notions'
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economy will be upsurged over the period of time.
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in Japan is hardly
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for 5 seconds.
Therefore
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,
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should spend on
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such
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as
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.
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,
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authority
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have to spend some portion of
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because of
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for citizens. To elaborate
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, in some
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station
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government
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provide some basic
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as no waiting area and electricity problems ,but if
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money on required
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as free wifi, air conditionar waiting areas and
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ratio will be increased in
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people can motivated to travel with the use of public
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use to save
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to prevent global warming and air pollution.
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higher authority
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money on
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think that
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spend their
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on
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rather than
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poor
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Grammar
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Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to demonstrate your language proficiency. This includes mixing simple, compound, and complex sentences, as well as using synonyms effectively.
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Ensure that your essay stays on topic by clearly addressing the prompt. Refrain from straying into tangents that are not directly relevant to the question at hand.
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Improve the coherence of your essay by using transition words and phrases effectively. This will help in smoothly guiding the reader from one idea to the next, creating a more cohesive and compelling argument.
Stance
You presented a clear stance on the topic, which is a good practice for task achievement.
Examples
You provided specific examples to support your points, such as the example of train punctuality in Japan. This is effective in substantiating your argument.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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