The affects of modern enventions in people's healthy life

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In the fast - moving world, the modern electronic
enventions
the creation of something in the mind
inventions
are increasingly popular
such
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as tractors, washing machine
,
Accept space
,
vacuum cleaner and so on.
However
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,
Accept space
,
they have been
reducing
Suggestion
reduced
physical exercises people do. I support
this
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idea which negative
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
for
Suggestion
of
people's healthy life. In fact, people spend their spare time watching or playing a computer
daylong
Suggestion
day-long
dialing
dealing
after even they have a big lunch or supper.
As a result
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, they suffer from obesity. In consequence,
theyvparticipate
Suggestion
in sports to loose overweight. Actually, doing physical activity and doing sports than physical attempt nowadays.
On the other hand
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,
they
of them or themselves
their
causes sightless. Because television and computer
radiate
the output of a computer in readable form
readout
. By the way, modern
enventions
the creation of something in the mind
inventions
have
also
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conviniences
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
.
For example
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, we can
ceit
put into a certain place or abstract location
set
sit
cite
in medicine. A lot of cures are found against the diseases In conclusion,
negative sides
Suggestion
the negative sides
of technology is much more. So that we shouldn't ignore our health
.
Accept space
.
To cut a long story short, health is better than anything.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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