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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented graph depicts the number of
passangers
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passengers
 who used the three major airports in New York City
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between
 the years 1995-2000. The airports are –
John
F
.
Kennedy
, LaGuardia and Newark. The
amount
 of
passengers
is
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are
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 reported in millions. As we can see from the data, LaGuardia
airport
 had the highest
amount
 of
passengers
 among all the three airports.
This
 trend was consistent throughout all the years, except
from
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in
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 1997,
where
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when
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John
F
.
Kennedy
airport
 had a higher
amount
 of travellers –47
million
.
Similarly
, Newark
wad
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had
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 the least
amount
 of
passengers
,
beside
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 1998,
where
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when
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John
F
.
kennedy
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Kennedy
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 had
less
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fewer
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. When looking at the yearly changes, we can notice that LaGuardia
airport
 had a steady increase in the
amount
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number
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 of travellers.
While
 in 1995, 35
million
passengers
 used the
airport
, by 2000 over 65
million
 travellers used it.
In
contrast
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John
F
.
Kennedy
 had a decline between the years 1997 and 1999 of 15
million
passangers
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passengers
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words john, f, kennedy, amount, passengers, airport, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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