Write about the following topic. A person’s health is their own responsibility rather than the government’s responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Health
is a self
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
rather than government responsibility.It is Indivisual
responsiblity
Suggestion
responsible
responsibility
to aware of minimum
health
activities to keep them self healthy
,
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,
however
It's
local goverment responsbilty increase
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a local government responsibility to increase
a local government responsibility increase
local government responsbilty increase
local government responsibility increase
local goverment responsibility increase
public
health
services to
every
all people
everyone
one
should have healthy.I will discuss more detail why I disagree with the statement. Frist of all
,
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,
health
is
the more important
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the most important
part in
everybodys
life
,
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,
without good
health
we
can not
can not
cannot
do anything
,
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,
it is
primary indivisual
Suggestion
the primary individual responsibility
primary indivisual responsibility
a primary individual responsibility
primary indivisual responsibilities
primary individual responsibility
primary individual responsibilty
responsibilty
to keep our self healthy by doing regularly Gym
,
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,
walking and protein diet will helps to stay healthy.I would give an example doing Gym and walking burn the bad cholesterol ad it will avoid
heart
a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature
heat
stroke.Another example is doing Yoga will avoid breathing problem and it
increase
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increases
the mind concentrate and focus
,
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,
Yoga is
best medicine
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the best medicine
for lot of illness.
Health
is
fundamental right
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a fundamental right
for
every
all people
everyone
one
.
Goverment
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Government
should
focas
the concentration of attention or energy on something
focus
on effective
service
for medical
emegency
a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action
emergency
.By
allocate
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allocating
enough budget will help
peoples
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peoples'
people's
health
.If we have good
money hire
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money, hire
more medical
proffesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professionals
professional
to provide
service
by
condact
direct the course of; manage or control
conduct
conducts
conductor
medical camps.
For
example condacting
Suggestion
example, conducting
example conducting
medical camps will
reslove
bring to an end; settle conclusively
resolve
lot
health
problems at right away and some the
rorel
living in or characteristic of farming or country life
rural
rare
places will
beinfits
Suggestion
benefit
benefits
from
this
program.
However
need to increase public
hospitols
a health facility where patients receive treatment
hospitals
hospital
for better
service
.
Every
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Everyone
one
in
coutry
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the country
country
have
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has
good
health
then
the country will
became
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become
health nation
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a healthier nation
healthier nation
. In
conclustion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
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,
health
is the
every
all people
everyone
one
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
to stay healthy
,
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,
in terms of good medical
service
is a
goverement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
to make sure to available for all the people in the country.
However indivisual
Accept comma addition
However, individual
However individual
efforts
also
more improatent
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most important
more important
for good
health
in terms of physical exercise and good food habits.

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