Write about the following topic. A person’s health is their own responsibility rather than the government’s responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Health

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is a self

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responsibilty

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

rather than government responsibility.It is Indivisual

responsiblity

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responsible

responsibility

to aware of minimum

health

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activities to keep them self healthy

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however

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local goverment responsbilty increase

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a local government responsibility to increase

a local government responsibility increase

local government responsbilty increase

local government responsibility increase

local goverment responsibility increase

public

health

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services to

every

all people

everyone

one

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should have healthy.I will discuss more detail why I disagree with the statement. Frist of all

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health

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the more important

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the most important

part in

everybodys

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life

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without good

health

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can not

cannot

do anything

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it is

primary indivisual

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the primary individual responsibility

primary indivisual responsibility

a primary individual responsibility

primary indivisual responsibilities

primary individual responsibility

primary individual responsibilty

responsibilty

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to keep our self healthy by doing regularly Gym

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walking and protein diet will helps to stay healthy.I would give an example doing Gym and walking burn the bad cholesterol ad it will avoid

heart

a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature

heat

stroke.Another example is doing Yoga will avoid breathing problem and it

increase

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increases

the mind concentrate and focus

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Yoga is

best medicine

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the best medicine

for lot of illness.

Health

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fundamental right

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a fundamental right

for

every

all people

everyone

one

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Goverment

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Government

should

focas

the concentration of attention or energy on something

focus

on effective

service

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for medical

emegency

a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action

emergency

.By

allocate

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allocating

enough budget will help

peoples

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peoples'

people's

health

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.If we have good

money hire

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money, hire

more medical

proffesional

engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood

professionals

professional

to provide

service

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condact

direct the course of; manage or control

conduct

conducts

conductor

medical camps.

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example condacting

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example, conducting

example conducting

medical camps will

reslove

bring to an end; settle conclusively

resolve

lot

health

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problems at right away and some the

rorel

living in or characteristic of farming or country life

rural

rare

places will

beinfits

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benefit

benefits

from

this

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program.

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need to increase public

hospitols

a health facility where patients receive treatment

hospitals

hospital

for better

service

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Every

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Everyone

one

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coutry

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the country

country

have

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has

good

health

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then

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the country will

became

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become

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health nation

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a healthier nation

healthier nation

. In

conclustion

a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration

conclusion

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health

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is the

every

all people

everyone

one

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responsibilty

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

to stay healthy

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in terms of good medical

service

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is a

goverement

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

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responsibilty

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

to make sure to available for all the people in the country.

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However indivisual

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However, individual

However individual

efforts

also

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more improatent

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most important

more important

for good

health

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in terms of physical exercise and good food habits.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease,governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, owning a homes rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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