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Some people prefer full-time jobs because they offer stability. Other people prefer casual jobs because of the freedom they offer. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Jobs are no doubt of immense importance
for
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in
 people’s lives.
Although
, to some extent, I agree with the opinion that working full-time offers stable incomes and in turn, they have good financial conditions, I
also
 agree that the flexibility casual jobs bring is beneficial for some individuals. Undoubtedly, a stable and continuous income is the primary reason why the majority of people prefer to
pursuit
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pursuits
 full-time jobs. Especially, a family has to ensure at
last
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least
 a reliable and ongoing financial source. A good example of
this
 is that some young parents with two kids need to pay a large amount of home mortgages and monthly expenditures, resulting they seldom have savings.
Therefore
, a full-time job could offer an enough secure feeling to those families.
Besides
, financial stability is not only attracted to
families but
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families, but
also
 to singles. Given that singles will marry and establish families in the future, a full-time job is one of keys to attract
partner
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partners
. Others,
however
, advocate that casual jobs offer them enough space to do what they like. To illustrate, a student who just graduated from a university and is planning to take a gap year. Only do casual jobs can she travel around
world
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the world
 and earn daily expenses at the same time. Another major benefit is the women who must look after their kids. Casual works can perfectly suit their schedule. It is not uncommon that women work two days per week, and pay more attention to educating their kids for the rest of
week
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the week
. In conclusion, I believe that both types of jobs have their own merits, choosing jobs is based on people’s purpose and preference.
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