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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individual and on society?

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It is true that our sleeping patterns have changed significantly over the
last
 fifty years. People now get considerably less sleep than their ancestors. Personally, l think
this
 is because of the increasing stress and the effects of the digital age
.
Accept space
.
However
,
this
 phenomenon has serious repercussions for individuals and societies.
To begin
 with, the competitive and hectic lifestyle of the modern times requires people to be more attentive than ever before. Nowadays, people are in a constant race to fulfil their basic needs and to achieve their goals and
as a result
 they get less time for sleep. Sleeping less is actually considered as a virtue these days.
For example
, most high-profile personalities with amazing achievements
such
 as Bill Gates take pride in cutting down on their in their rest hours and consider that a key for success.
Furthermore
, the computer era has surrounded us with a huge number of screens which have a major effect on our conscious brains. Studies have shown that the blue light of computer, television and mobile screens makes the brain more awake and prevents it from falling asleep. Unfortunately,
this
 trend is a serious problem that has a negative impact on the well-being of communities.
For instance
, less sleeping hours can cause tiredness, depression, lack of concentration as well as many health problems including obesity, diabetes and high blood pressure. All of these issues will eventually result in a weak society with low productivity.
Thus
, sufficient sleep is vital for individuals and nations. In conclusion, after looking at why people sleep less and what problems
this
 cause, it is hoped that governments around the world launch education campaigns to inform the public about the importance of getting adequate sleep
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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