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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in that country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
People have different views about why people are interested in learning a foreign
language
. Some people say that a foreign
language
 can help them to work and
travel
 easily in overseas while others believe that there are more reasons to
study
 a foreign
language
 than reasons for work or
travel
. In my point of view, I agree that a foreign
language
 can bring more benefits for people than two reasons above. On one hand, it is obvious that foreign
language
 plays a significant role in helping people
to live in overseas
Suggestion
to live overseas
 for both working and
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 areas.
Firstly it
Accept comma addition
Firstly, it
 allows people
communicate
Suggestion
to communicate
 easily with local residents. Understanding of a
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 of local food is usually a difficult part for foreigner if they do not know about local
language
.
Therefore
, if traveller can speak a foreign
language
 they might be considered as a part of local
community
Suggestion
communities
 as well as be welcomed to visit resident’s houses.
Furthermore
, a foreign
language
 enables people to work effectively in their areas.
For example
, applying jobs in
American
Suggestion
America
, employees must influence English as a part of
employer’s requirement
Suggestion
the employer’s requirement
 in
oder
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
 to meet the highest quality standard of working.
On the other hand
, there are more benefits for people who learn a new
language
.
First
 of all, People can
study
 abroad if they have a foreign
language
. Without a new
language
, students are not allowed to get a visa in which countries’s they like to
study
 a higher education.
For example
, if Vietnamese students want to
study
 Master in Australia they have to gain at least 6.5
ielts
a small hole (usually round and finished around the edges) in cloth or leather for the passage of a cord or hook or bar
eyelets
outs
 in academic score to be accepted to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 universities.
In addition
, Learning a new
language
is help
Suggestion
has helped
helps
 people to discover the world.
For example
, the world can be explored by watching Discovery channel at home
instead
 of going overseas. In short, it helps people who want to learn a
news
not of long duration; having just (or relatively recently) come into being or been made or acquired or discovered
new
nice
 thing just being at home and reduces the cost to
travel
. In conclusion,
Although
 learning a new
language
 allows people to word and
travel
 effectively in
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
 of their home countries, it seems to me that a foreign
language
 brings more benefits for people who learn them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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