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Ordinary People try to copy famous people either reading and magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people

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A common person these days has the tendency to imitate personalities in the print and/ or electronic media. One reason behind
this
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is social
pressures
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pressures, although
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 at times it is purely due to their attraction to these people.
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 essay shall cover factors driving
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 trend in the society.
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,
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 people are
idealized
regarded with deep or rapturous love (especially as if for a god)
idolized
 by the masses and when they get attached to a cause, many people start following it. As an example, Imran
khan
a title given to rulers or other important people in Asian countries
Khan
 is idealized by both the youth and elderly population of Pakistan.
Recently when
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Recently, when
 he initiated the Billion Tree Tsunami campaign, many individuals planted trees in their households and workplaces. Schools carried out special events to educate youth about
importance
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the importance
 of
trees though
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trees, though
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 concept wasn’t prevalent before.
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, it is vastly believed that people in the spotlight are up to date with the current fashion. An illustration of
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 argument is that, people look into fashion magazines, blogs and shows for suggestions on what to wear ahead of any event.
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, when the famous actress xx wore bright red
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
on
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of
 her wedding, many girls opted for the same in their bridal dress. In conclusion, in my opinion a good act can be learnt from anyone. We need to use our judgement and
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 each case individually. If a celebrity is attached to a good cause we should not refrain from following
them but
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them, but
 when it comes to changing our lifestyles, including what we wear, it is not always necessary to do as they do.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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