More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The problem of obesity stares

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our face with more and more children turning out to be overweight from a very young age, especially in prosperous nations. While most people don’t take

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as a serious issue until it leads to a medical health condition, it is important to discuss the matter gravely in order to make people aware about the ill-effects which in turn will help avoid obesity. I believe, among other things, the most significant reason for kids gaining a lot of weight is their lifestyle patterns. While being rich is great, it comes with the downside of parents giving enormous pocket money to children, almost like a mechanism to feel less guilty for having busy schedules, where they can’t make time for their kids.

Kids

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Kids, on

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, splurge on fast

food

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and junk

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, binging on burgers and slurping ice creams. The amount of processed

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that an average kid ends up eating throughout the

day

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is not funny!

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, my boss’s child has French fries for breakfast with 3 different types of dips, burgers or fried chicken buckets for lunch – again with a lot of mayonnaise and ketchup and ends his

day

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with a large pizza with more ketchup! His mid-meal snacks include chocolate bars, ice creams, chips and cold drinks. When I was babysitting him for a

day

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, despite making special home-cooked meals that I thought he would enjoy, he ended up ordering

food

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from a fast

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joint because he was so used to eating out!

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of prolonged unhealthy eating habits with no exercise, kids are diagnosed with heart diseases

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as diabetes and cholesterol at a surprisingly young age.

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most people switch to a healthier diet after

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point, it is too late in the

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to reverse the effects. Consequences

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as frequent urination, lethargy, feeling tired almost all the time, having to keep a check on sweet consumption etc.

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just some of the outcomes of having a heart disease

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of being overweight.

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, my colleague’s child, an excellent dancer who won quite a few national-level awards for her performances, has now had to give up on pursuing her passion because of the excess weight she has gained over a short period of time. She is no longer able to do the perfect split or even pull through an entire song before collapsing to the ground as if she just ran a marathon. The

condition not

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condition, not

only affected her

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physically, but

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broke her emotionally, shattering her confidence and determination to be the best at what she does.

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is especially a problem for wealthy countries where the future of the country - the youngsters are more and more laid back and incapable of driving normal lives. I would like to conclude that children alone are not responsible for being obese. It is the whole family that promotes unhealthy eating habits leading to weight-gain. With little or no exercise, the condition is only going to get worse. Obesity affects both physical and mental well-being of people giving rise to more heart diseases and conditions like anxiety, depression etc. In developed countries, we will soon see entire generations of

over weight

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

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children inching closer towards an unhealthy,

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life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

549 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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