Some People Feel That Entertainers Such As Film Stars, Pop Musicians Or Sports Stars Are Paid Too Much Money. Do You Agree Or Disagree? Which Other Types Of Job Should Be Highly Paid?
In the present era, the
government
pays a lot of money to Entertainers Such
As Film Stars, Pop Musicians Or Sports Stars. But the real question is , It is this
have a positive impact in the future ? or is coming with a negative on government
and citizens?
To begin
with, the government
should look up to more important things to less important things which benefit the people
for the future of the salve. Such
as education , hospitals and taking care of people
's livelihood. For example
, the government
should pay for the easy process to access to buying homes because it is illogical people
do not have a place to live and the government
pay millions of dollars for sports stars or famous singers. Not only but also
there are many poor patients who have a difficult situation and they need expensive medicine but they can not pay for it.
Another point to consider is that we can interested in entertainment in various ways, without paying too much money. For example
, there are many local talents from the same country we can encourage and support them to improve their skills and give them the opportunity to participate as part of the entertainment. Moreover
, there are many jobs the government
should pay for such
as, first responders to be more specific, firefighters government
should care about them because they sacrifice for us.
In conclusion, in my opinion, the government
should reconsider their payments to celebrities because this
could have a negative impact on the development of people
and society.Submitted by waad.balubaid on
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Provide more specific examples or evidence to support claims, particularly in the area of government spending priorities.
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You present a reasonable argument regarding the prioritization of government spending over entertainers.
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