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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
It is argued that students get more benefits than the society after completing the territorial
education
 so, all the cost of tuition must be paid by the students.
However
, the essay does not support
this
 statement due to some reasons.
Firstly
, the government should invest some
amount
 of money as it will help to improve the economy of the
nation
 for long term and
secondly
, the motivation and support will increase the number of students.
To begin
 with,
Education
 helps to develop not only the society, but
also
 the
nation
.
This
 is because students who are coming out of those institutions by achieving high grades and skills, influence the chances of getting a high paid job, which ensures that the country gain an exorbitant
amount
 of money as tax from those students for long term and eventually, the country's economy will be flourished.
For instance
, South Korea invested large
amount
 of their budget for the
education
 and
this
 has reaped benefits with high-tech companies
such
 as Samsung. It is not just improving the economy of the country, it will
also
 increase the number of educated people in the
nation
.
This
 is because there are many intellectual and talented students who do not have enough financial capacity to continue their higher
education
.If the governments are ready to lend money
then
 it will inspire numerous youngsters to complete their
further
 studies,
As a result
, they will be more dedicated and responsible for the development of the society.
For example
, Kerala is the number one state in
education
 in India because the government provides subsidies to students.
In addition
, it accounted for the lowest crime rates and poverty level compared to other states. In conclusion,
education
 is the key feature for the whole development of a
nation
 so, the government should support students
instead
 of forcing them to spend a huge
amount
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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