Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home and more children will study from home as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think it is a negative or a positive development?

Due to more accessible and less money spent on computer technology,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of people across the world are likely to
work
and
study
at
home
. It has more flaws compared to
advantages
Suggestion
the advantages
.
This
essay will discuss about the
negetive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
negatives
development by describing the effects on different age group by working from
home
and
also
their creative thinking as
negetive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
one. Nowadays, many adults are preferred to
work
from
home
and
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of
chidrens
a young person of either sex
children
are using computers to
study
as their technology has been increased. It
effects
have an effect upon
affects
different age groups. At
first
the people, who were working from
home
doesnot
Suggestion
does not
posses
have as an attribute, knowledge, or skill
possess
much knowledge compared to the people, who were doing
phisical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
activities
in
Suggestion
at
work
.
Similary
Suggestion
Similarly
, children don'
t
understand things by using computers. A tutor is required to teach about certain things and it will be easy to understand.
For
instance recently
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instance, recently
a company
has conducted
Suggestion
conducted
a
compitetion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
to know about the performance of
employes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
. In that it is justified that the person, who is working from
home
has less knowledge
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
the person working in working condition. It
also
effects
have an effect upon
affects
their creative
thinking
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thinking, this
this
effects
have an effect upon
affects
the person physical activity.
Firstly
, the people working from
home
are less creative because they do their
work
to particular limit. They won'
t
try to think beyond the extinct. In the same way
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
, who prefer to
study
through
home
also
don'
t
have knowledge
then
child going to school. They will
also
not try to think beyond their limits.
For example
a friend of mine
preffered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
to
study
from
home
and a project is assigned to me and my friend as he
don'
Suggestion
doesn't know
t
know much about that. His performance was very low compared to me. He is not putting his
phiscal
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
efforts on the
work
Accept comma addition
work, moreover
moreover
he was unable to think. From
this
it is concluded that there are more flaws
on
Suggestion
in
people who
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
prefers
to
work
throgh
from beginning to end
through
home
by using computer technology. The
negetives
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negatives
negative
like efficiency and creative level and
also
other
negetive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
developments are more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
the positive developments. So, people should put their efforts by working in working
condition but
Accept comma addition
condition, but
not through
home
Suggestion
the home
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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