The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Some people argue that the advent of
technology
has created a disparity between the upper and the lower classes; however
, others possess different perspectives on the existence of technology
in this
modern era. This
essay will demonstrate whether technology
varies segments of society
and stand on the belief that technology
has been accessed publicly.
On the one hand, people who advocate the disadvantages of technology
believe that its existence only poses inequality in society
classes. This
imbalance adoption of technology
occurs because not all levels of society
can afford the tools to provide access to technology
such
as gadgets, internet
connection, knowledge, etc. In addition
, the difference in infrastructure especially in rural areas also
worsens the conditions such
as the unsustainability of electricity supply, lack of digital literacy, and unaffordable of
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internet
prices. Therefore
, accessibility of technology
can only be reached by a certain class of society
.
On the other hand
, with the increasing number of people relying on internet
use in their daily lives, technology
has been prevalent for all categories of society
. Moreover
, when the pandemic in 2019 happened in all countries, technology
changed people’s lives for example
working, learning, serving, and many others by
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society
, the government has been so proactive in providing public access to technology
by subsidizing internet
connection for students in all regions, providing digital literacy for teachers, and creating e-government systems to serve society
. Stakeholders such
as internet
provider corporations also
take a part in supporting a balance of access by creating several affordable services for internet
connection and widening their operation to rural areas by special offerings.
In conclusion, the gap in technological influence will never occur if governments and stakeholders play a role in maintaining the balance of accessibility and support at all levels of society
in all regions of the country.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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Ensure that your introduction clearly states both sides of the argument. You have done well in presenting the topic, but it could be more explicit in outlining what each side believes.
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Provide a brief summary of the main points in your conclusion to reinforce your argument. Your conclusion is good, but a little more detail would make it stronger.
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Avoid repeating words or phrases. For instance, the word 'technology' is used very frequently. Use synonyms or rephrase sentences to maintain the reader's interest.
structure and flow
Your essay has a clear and logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You have adequately discussed both sides of the argument, showing a balanced perspective.
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The examples and explanations provided are relevant to the topic and support your main points well.
Your opinion
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