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Universities offer an online course for students. Do you think its a positive or negative development for students?

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Internet-based learning has been around for recent years and it seems to continue its aggressive
evolvement
the act of sharing in the activities of a group
involvement
 as technology comes in.
Although
this
 model is applauded by many experts, there still exist many limitations. On the one hand, there are a number of advantages of online education.
First
, by enrolling in online university courses, younger learners have an opportunity to study in a flexible way.
This
 means students studying on the Internet can work whenever and wherever is convenient, allowing them not to lose their knowledge like students on traditional courses.
Second
, since some international websites, especially YouTube, provide people a myriad of useful information without fees, students are easier to access free education.
For example
, If students wish to gain knowledge of programming, they just need to search and learn free computer courses on YouTube, helping them achieve their full potential.
On the other hand
, studying online is not without downsides.
First
, in order to gain knowledge significantly, students are required to have a high level of self-discipline. In fact, a myriad of distractions from either on the Internet or in life could be detrimental to learners' concentration, which has a negative impact on their educational learning outcomes.
Second
, since almost all students usually take online courses alone, they could study in the low-energy surrounding environment due to less direct interaction.
Therefore learners
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Therefore, learners
 can be
lacked
Suggestion
lacking
 motivation and encouragement from not only their peers but
also
 their teacher, which might lead to their dropout. In conclusion, using the Internet to improve students' practical skills have drawbacks outweigh benefits. Learners should
also
 consider their own situation to make their best decision.

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