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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the numbers of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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nowadays
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Nowadays
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 lots of pupils seek part and full-time jobs whilst pursuing their
education
 in colleges or universities which often leads them to focus less on their marks and be stressed most of the time
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 In
this
 essay I will explore the reasons why people
work
 during their college years and suggest some solutions to the issue
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Firstly I
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Firstly, I
 will discuss the financial deficit students confront.And
secondly
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 I will consider some other practical rationals which
implies
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imply
 working during studying phase
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 To commence with
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 a
study
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study, work
work
 balance, has always been a huge dilemma facing students globally
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 Most students from middle class have to
work
 long hours in order to cover their tuition fees as well as life expenses
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A
 fundamental reason
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for
this
 is the increasingly rising
education
 cost
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one
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One
 solution to
this
 problem is the interest free student loans which ought to be granted by the government
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Consequently
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 students will not be burdened
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with
 the heavy load and the stress of the demanding long working hours
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Furthermore
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 it is
also
 true that some students would rather
work
 during their studies in order to attain experience and job skills which qualifies to some better job positions after graduation
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This
 is more common amongst foreign international students who are planning to settle where they completed their
education
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A
 considerably efficient method to help students acquire these skills and experience is throughout the re-structure of various majors plans to be inclusive of an imperative practical training in their fields for a duration of one year minimum
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As a result
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 students will take advantage of
this
 training period by gaining the crucial skills for the various
jobs'
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job
 requirements
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 To sum up
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 the financial factor as well as the desire to attain experience and local skill
plays
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play
 the major role in pushing people to seek employment whilst they are still studying
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 In my opinion
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 governments should grant certain subsidies for students in their college years to enhance their fiscal situation in
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a way
 that
wont
will not
won't
 force them to
work
 to pay for their living and
education
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