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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 World Cup football match and the Olympics are held worldwide with great national support and expectations. As a fan of those competitions, I agree with the idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national unity. In
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 of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international games work for easing tensions among different nations.
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, South and North Korea have football games
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 nations a chance to understand each other deeply. In the mid 1990s, a
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 of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through the sports,
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 divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel the patriotic unity.
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, some sports matches can make international relations worse.
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, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big matches in
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 countries where full of tensions
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 rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing games affect the players directly. In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be one of
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