The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates data about the scores of three different teams during four different
seasons
.
Overall
, Team
A secured high scores in all the seasons
. On the other hand
, Team
B managed with
the Change preposition
to
last
position
for the initial two
seasons
, while
Team
C got into last
Change the article
the last
position
for the final two
seasons
.
In 2002, the number of points
scored by Team
A is 82. Then
the points
saw a significant decline to 60 in the following season
. Despite falling to 43 points
in the 2004 season
, the figure increased to 55 in the last
season
. This
is the leading team
in all the
four events.
With regards to Correct article usage
apply
Team
B, In 2002, they closed the season
with 5 points
, which is half the value of Team
C. Following
this
, the number of points
improved to 11 and 35 respectively, in the next
two
years. Finally
, In 2005, they got 8 points
. In Contrast
, Team
C which was in second
position
for the initial two
seasons
,
fell to the Remove the comma
apply
third
position
in the final two
seasons
with 12 and 8 points
in 2004 and 2005 respectively.Submitted by Goutham on
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