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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data about the scores of three different teams during four different
seasons
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.
Overall
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,
Team
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 A secured high scores in all the
seasons
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.
On the other hand
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,
Team
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 B managed
with
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to
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 the
last
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position
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 for the initial
two
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seasons
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,
while
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Team
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 C got into
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last
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the last
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position
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 for the final
two
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seasons
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. In 2002, the number of
points
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 scored by
Team
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 A is 82.
Then
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 the
points
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 saw a significant decline to 60 in the following
season
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. Despite falling to 43
points
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 in the 2004
season
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, the figure increased to 55 in the
last
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season
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.
This
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 is the leading
team
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 in all
the
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four events. With regards to
Team
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 B, In 2002, they closed the
season
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 with 5
points
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, which is half the value of
Team
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 C.
Following
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this
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, the number of
points
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 improved to 11 and 35 respectively, in the
next
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two
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 years.
Finally
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, In 2005, they got 8
points
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.
In Contrast
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,
Team
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 C which was in
second
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position
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 for the initial
two
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seasons
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,
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 fell to the
third
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position
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 in the final
two
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seasons
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 with 12 and 8
points
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 in 2004 and 2005 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seasons, team, position, two, points, season with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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